Letterless words and pageless books-
and ink blots on the flowers;
Ghosts scratch their heads and tap their pens,
all across the hours.
Winds can howl and cease to be,
by one twitch of my pen;
I spoke of writing a poem tonight,
and by dawn I've written ten.
Emily sits aside nobody,
the Raven, above, waits;
Frost dances in a yellow wood,
among the long lost dates.
A tall, well spoken willow,
looms over the grave;
Protecting every dated word,
and every thought they gave.
I crumple another masterpiece,
with thoughts I'd thought to save;
and as it strikes the baset bottom,
it rests in its ink grave.
I'm here to give a critique from #Inspiring-Words
First off, I would like to say I absolutley love this poem! It is so original!
Second off, the critique!
The puncuation is good, after reading up on poetry puncuation (need to do some more
For example you could do this:
Winds can howl and cease to be
by one twitch of my pen;
I spoke of writing a poem tonight
and by dawn I've written ten.
The reason I say this is because poets (and readers of poems) usually know to stop after each stanza but once again correct me if I'm wrong
Your words are powerful, so I have no comment on that
The emotion is just as powerful!
Like the critique before me said it is like your writing about dead poets, which is really cool.
Once again this a beautiful poem
That is all for my critique!
This poem has been moved to the "Poetry III" folder
Love you avatar btw it is so freaking cute
Firstly, even though it is a tad revealing, I still love the title.
Now, the crit:
I like how you set up the scene of a graveyard of stories by mentioning 'letterless words' and 'pageless books', almost as if they are tombstones or something similar. However, letterless should be a compound word, letter-less.
ST 2 is lovely in the way it shows the control the speaker has over what he or she is writing.
ST 3 seems to me as if you are writing about other famous authors. Emily Dickenson (I am not too sure on the surname), Edgar Allen Poe and Robert Frost. However, I'm not too sure what the 'long lost dates' are and how they refer to the rest of the ST.
ST 4 seems to give the ideas that the authors mentioned in ST 3 are the ghosts mentioned in ST 1. If this is the case then I would change 'grave' to 'graves' as there would be more than one. Especially as you mention Ghosts in ST 1.
ST 5: What is a baset? My dictionary doesn't have it. Could it have perhaps started out as basket?
I like how you have punctuated this piece, you have done so very well.
I also like how you include the famous authors, but not as a comparison to you. They are almost included as a standard you want to reach.
Overall, I enjoyed reading this.
Jo