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Letterless words and pageless books-
and ink blots on the flowers;
Ghosts scratch their heads and tap their pens,
all across the hours.

Winds can howl and cease to be,
by one twitch of my pen;
I spoke of writing a poem tonight,
and by dawn I've written ten.

Emily sits aside nobody,
the Raven, above, waits;
Frost dances in a yellow wood,
among the long lost dates.

A tall, well spoken willow,
looms over the grave;
Protecting every dated word,
and every thought they gave.

I crumple another masterpiece,
with thoughts I'd thought to save;
and as it strikes the baset bottom,
it rests in its ink grave.
Thanks for reading :)
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Foreststone Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Hi :wave:
I'm here to give a critique from #Inspiring-Words :iconinspiring-words:!

First off, I would like to say I absolutley love this poem! It is so original! :love:

Second off, the critique!
The puncuation is good, after reading up on poetry puncuation (need to do some more :blush:) and standards it is good but some tips are you don't need to do it after every stanza (at least I don't think) correct me if I'm wrong ;). What I have heard throughout the past 6 or 7 years I've been writing poetry you don't need to puncuate after each stanza.
For example you could do this:
Winds can howl and cease to be
by one twitch of my pen;
I spoke of writing a poem tonight
and by dawn I've written ten.

The reason I say this is because poets (and readers of poems) usually know to stop after each stanza but once again correct me if I'm wrong ;)
Your words are powerful, so I have no comment on that :).
The emotion is just as powerful!
Like the critique before me said it is like your writing about dead poets, which is really cool.
Once again this a beautiful poem :+fav:!
That is all for my critique!
This poem has been moved to the "Poetry III" folder
LuckyClover38 Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much for the critique :)
Foreststone Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Love you avatar btw it is so freaking cute :love:
MagicalJoey Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2012   Writer
I will be critiquing this piece on behalf of

Firstly, even though it is a tad revealing, I still love the title.

Now, the crit:
:bulletred: ST = Stanza
:bulletred: L = Line

I like how you set up the scene of a graveyard of stories by mentioning 'letterless words' and 'pageless books', almost as if they are tombstones or something similar. However, letterless should be a compound word, letter-less.

ST 2 is lovely in the way it shows the control the speaker has over what he or she is writing.

ST 3 seems to me as if you are writing about other famous authors. Emily Dickenson (I am not too sure on the surname), Edgar Allen Poe and Robert Frost. However, I'm not too sure what the 'long lost dates' are and how they refer to the rest of the ST.

ST 4 seems to give the ideas that the authors mentioned in ST 3 are the ghosts mentioned in ST 1. If this is the case then I would change 'grave' to 'graves' as there would be more than one. Especially as you mention Ghosts in ST 1.

ST 5: What is a baset? My dictionary doesn't have it. Could it have perhaps started out as basket?

I like how you have punctuated this piece, you have done so very well.

I also like how you include the famous authors, but not as a comparison to you. They are almost included as a standard you want to reach.

Overall, I enjoyed reading this.

LuckyClover38 Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thank you for the review :)
WillSchenck Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2012
spot-on. this is chilling. i love it. please keep writing.

LuckyClover38 Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thanks so much :) I will!
VampKitty91 Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow I love this. Very powerful!
LuckyClover38 Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thank you <3
theWitchofGrich Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2012
Very good!!! I love it! It's full of beautiful descriptions and motives :)
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